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CJW · 11-05-2009, 12:08 AM

I took this for an assignment for "pattern":

Please tell me how I can improve.

(other than take of the sig...lol)

**Vudoo4u2** · 11-05-2009, 07:50 AM

I like the depth of field, but I think the composition needs to be cropped a bit perhaps, to pick a more specific purpose for the picture. If you asked me what the theme was without telling me, I should be able to fathom a reasonable guess, and I dont think I can with the current crop.

I do like the darks/lights though, its well balanced lighting for the subject which keeps it interesting.

Id say just toy with some crop options first, see if you can make it more focused on a particular subject?

CJW · 11-05-2009, 02:04 PM

I am not one for square crops...I don't know why...but...how is this one?

john · 11-05-2009, 06:19 PM

im not sure if you wanted to go for 100% b&w, but if you were, theres a bit of green/yellow in the bottom left. id bump the saturation down all the way just for good measure or you could just brush in some desaturation. also, there seems to be a bit of pixelation throughout the bottom part of the image. it could just be photobuckets terrible hosting, though

CJW · 11-05-2009, 06:21 PM

is the crop better? I will look at the saturation...

john · 11-05-2009, 06:29 PM

personally, i like it more without the crop

Fat Buff Guy · 11-05-2009, 09:14 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by john

personally, i like it more without the crop

i think i agree, maybe a little less background though. but its all awesome sauce!

Stupeyfied · 11-06-2009, 03:18 PM

CJ!!! I just realised that was your shot! I loved it!! =)

11-05-2009, 12:08 AM	#1 (permalink)
CJW PhotoFreak Join Date: Nov 2009 Location: South Dakota Shoots With: a Sony Posts: 124	Spiral I took this for an assignment for "pattern": Please tell me how I can improve. (other than take of the sig...lol) __________________ ~CJ Don't listen to me, I know nothing.

11-05-2009, 07:50 AM	#2 (permalink)
Vudoo4u2 Night Sh1ft Join Date: Jun 2009 Location: Chicago Shoots With: 5D MKII Flickr: AutoPhotog Posts: 509	I like the depth of field, but I think the composition needs to be cropped a bit perhaps, to pick a more specific purpose for the picture. If you asked me what the theme was without telling me, I should be able to fathom a reasonable guess, and I dont think I can with the current crop. I do like the darks/lights though, its well balanced lighting for the subject which keeps it interesting. Id say just toy with some crop options first, see if you can make it more focused on a particular subject? __________________ A turbo: exhaust gasses go into the turbocharger and spin it, witchcraft happens and you go faster. Canon 24-70 F2.8 L : Canon 70-200 F2.8 IS/L : Canon 5D Mark II : B+W Filters : Photo Whore

11-05-2009, 02:04 PM	#3 (permalink)
CJW PhotoFreak Join Date: Nov 2009 Location: South Dakota Shoots With: a Sony Posts: 124	I am not one for square crops...I don't know why...but...how is this one? __________________ ~CJ Don't listen to me, I know nothing.

11-05-2009, 06:19 PM	#4 (permalink)
john PhotoFreak Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: Los Angeles Shoots With: Canon 450D Flickr: john_howard Posts: 123	im not sure if you wanted to go for 100% b&w, but if you were, theres a bit of green/yellow in the bottom left. id bump the saturation down all the way just for good measure or you could just brush in some desaturation. also, there seems to be a bit of pixelation throughout the bottom part of the image. it could just be photobuckets terrible hosting, though __________________ los_angeles a sunny place for shady people

11-05-2009, 06:21 PM	#5 (permalink)
CJW PhotoFreak Join Date: Nov 2009 Location: South Dakota Shoots With: a Sony Posts: 124	is the crop better? I will look at the saturation... __________________ ~CJ Don't listen to me, I know nothing.

11-05-2009, 06:29 PM	#6 (permalink)
john PhotoFreak Join Date: Oct 2009 Location: Los Angeles Shoots With: Canon 450D Flickr: john_howard Posts: 123	personally, i like it more without the crop __________________ los_angeles a sunny place for shady people

11-06-2009, 03:18 PM	#8 (permalink)
Stupeyfied PhotoLover Join Date: Nov 2009 Location: Rapid City, SD Shoots With: Nikon D90, and an assortment of lenses Flickr: Stupeyfied Posts: 61	CJ!!! I just realised that was your shot! I loved it!! =)

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